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How would you rate the latest chapter ?
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PostSubject: My short story   Fri Sep 14, 2012 2:52 pm

Alright as you show extreme enthusiasm as always in my threads I'll just make it like a weekly story or something that I will try write Smile.

Full story:

Chapter 1 - the trial:
 
Chapter 2 - Hard Lessons:
 
Chapter 3 - The Egonium Flowers:
 
Chapter 4 - The Mind Games:
 
Chapter 5 – The flow :
 
Chapter 6 – The Ethanimus:
 


Rest of the story in my next post.


I added a voting system on the top of the page. It will help me to get some feedback on what I do good or wrong, and also on how many people actually read what I write here as if nobody reads - what's the point in it ? Please vote seriously as I will take those votes seriously. Dont forget to update your votes for each new chapter.



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PostSubject: Re: My short story   Fri Sep 14, 2012 2:53 pm

Chapter 7 – get in, get out:
 
Chapter 8 – The Void Tournament:
 


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PostSubject: Re: My short story   Fri Sep 14, 2012 6:33 pm

[unrelated]DAMN, I CAN'T POST IN THIS THREAD THEN BECAUSE YOU SPECIFICALLY SAID NO TROLLING AND THAT'S ONE OF THE FEW THINGS TROLLS DO. THIS IS PROBABLY THE LAST POST I WILL BE MAKING IN THIS THREAD. GOODBYE.[/unrelated]
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PostSubject: Re: My short story   Sat Sep 15, 2012 1:40 am

I see my idea sparked the community with enthusiasm as always ... man how do those idiotic threads like "Ban the guy above you" get viral ....
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PostSubject: Re: My short story   Sat Sep 15, 2012 1:42 am

Iv121 wrote:
I see my idea sparked the community with enthusiasm as always ... man how do those idiotic threads like "Ban the guy above you" get viral ....

That's what always puzzled me about humans... Although it was broken into neat paragraphs, I only got through half of the first sentence. What's wrong with me.
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PostSubject: Re: My short story   Sat Sep 15, 2012 4:04 am

Query: Will there be giant owls, possibly of the fire breathing variety.
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PostSubject: Re: My short story   Sat Sep 15, 2012 4:30 am

ACH0225 wrote:
Query: Will there be giant owls, possibly of the fire breathing variety.

Fire breathing no but if you want to add giant owls to the story you can as long as it connects to the story.
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PostSubject: Re: My short story   Sat Sep 15, 2012 10:34 am

I have a plan, but first whatshisface has to go through the portal thingy.
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PostSubject: Re: My short story   Sat Sep 15, 2012 12:30 pm

ACH0225 wrote:
I have a plan, but first whatshisface has to go through the portal thingy.
Is yttrium involved?
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PostSubject: Re: My short story   Sat Sep 15, 2012 2:00 pm

There is a chance...
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PostSubject: Re: My short story   Mon Sep 17, 2012 5:27 pm

Alright so I decided to change the format of the thread a bit. I will post every week or so another part of the story and you ... well read and enjoy it Smile . Let me know what you think.

Chapter 2 - Hard Lessons:
 


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PostSubject: Re: My short story   Mon Sep 17, 2012 6:44 pm

'Tis a shame I found it sufficiently long enough to not read beyond the first 2 words of the first chapter.
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PostSubject: Re: My short story   Mon Sep 17, 2012 7:14 pm

Very good, Iv. I may join in on the fun at some point, but whatshisface would have to go through some portal type thing. I have a character already prepared, a 15 foot non fire breathing owl, descended from owls stranded in the dimension whatshisface goes to by the time lord meddling with the Yttrium portals. His town thingy was carried off by the evil people things, and he lives in a toppled tower thing.
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PostSubject: Re: My short story   Tue Sep 18, 2012 6:04 am

The problem is the colour-scheme of the forum. If we had the background a lighter grey, then the text wouldn't contrast so much and I'd be able to read more than just a few lines of text (without my eyes exploding).

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PostSubject: Re: My short story   Tue Sep 18, 2012 6:27 am

The Schmetterling wrote:
The problem is the colour-scheme of the forum. If we had the background a lighter grey, then the text wouldn't contrast so much and I'd be able to read more than just a few lines of text (without my eyes exploding).

You have the spoilered version in my first post which has a nice soft blue color.
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PostSubject: Re: My short story   Tue Sep 18, 2012 10:11 am

Nice story.
Can't wait to hear the rest.
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PostSubject: Re: My short story   Tue Sep 18, 2012 1:14 pm

ACH0225 wrote:
Very good, Iv. I may join in on the fun at some point, but whatshisface would have to go through some portal type thing. I have a character already prepared, a 15 foot non fire breathing owl, descended from owls stranded in the dimension whatshisface goes to by the time lord meddling with the Yttrium portals. His town thingy was carried off by the evil people things, and he lives in a toppled tower thing.

That´s exactly what I meant with yttrium being involved. You are quite calculatable... Twisted Evil
Anyway, I don´t approve the part about the Doctor.
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PostSubject: Re: My short story   Fri Sep 21, 2012 3:31 pm


Chapter 3 - The Egonium Flowers:
 
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PostSubject: Re: My short story   Fri Oct 26, 2012 8:56 pm

Alright so I added a voting system on the top of the page. It will help me to get some feedback on what I do good or wrong, and also on how many people actually read what I write here as if nobody reads - what's the point in it ? Please vote seriously as I will take those votes seriously.


Chapter 4 - The Mind Games:
 
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PostSubject: Re: My short story   Sun Oct 28, 2012 1:28 am

Only one vote ??? Good thing I did this vote couse it turns out nobody reads that crap.
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PostSubject: Re: My short story   Sun Oct 28, 2012 1:58 am

Iv121 wrote:
Only one vote ??? Good thing I did this vote couse it turns out nobody reads that crap.
Eh, some people don't like to vote. I voted.
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PostSubject: Re: My short story   Sun Oct 28, 2012 11:47 am

Thanks, it is important for me to know people actually read it and to see either I improve or not. I actually really hope the 1/10 vote is a troll Sad .
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PostSubject: Re: My short story   Sun Oct 28, 2012 1:05 pm

Needs more cowbell

Apart from that pretty good
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PostSubject: Re: My short story   Sun Oct 28, 2012 1:45 pm

sry for the dumb question but what do you mean by cowbell ? I dunno the meaning of this word Sad (Yea my English is not perfect)

OMG 2 1/10. This is a very harsh score and it should be given with a good reason. Can anyone who voted 1 tell me why ?
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PostSubject: Re: My short story   Sat Nov 03, 2012 2:57 pm

New chapter is out, I hope I'll be able to finish entroducing you to the universe soon Smile . Don't forget to recast your votes.

Chapter 5 – The flow :
 
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